Very interesting listen!
Here are some thoughts, not necessarily critiques, just the first things that popped into my head, hope it doesn't come across as being nit picky, I really enjoyed your piece!
For the first section, I found the far panned melody a little distracting, especially because it seemed to be the most interesting thing happening melodically at that point in the track.
I love how you switch up the instrumentation at about 2:00! My ear was really itching for something a little more consonant as a palate cleanser after a pretty dissonant first section, I felt that was a missed idea to add more contrast between the sections.
Once again, nice work!